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In many countries, women and men are working full time .it is there fore logical for men and women to share household tasks.to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, in most countries,
men
 and
women
work
 full-
time
 without any disparities.
Hence
, it is the reason for sharing their
housework
work
 husband and wife. Because it
affect
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 their family life in various ways. In my opinion, I believe that the advantages of shairingbjouse hold task outweigh the drawbacks. In
this
 essay, I will explore
both
 views and ,
,
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Finally
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 I will present my own opinion. On the one hand, in today's world
men
 and
women
 don't have any specific jobs to select. Most jobs are done by
men
 and
women
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both
. So in a family husband and wife after working in their jobs come home very tired. After coming home there
are
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 so
many
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work
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 to do. So
both
 of them share the
housework
, it will be easier for them.
For example
: cooking, cleaning, washing and gardening. They can do those
work
 happily. And
also
 it helps to develop an anonymous understanding and peace of their family life.
On the other hand
, it may help to save
time
 sometime we go to
work
 early in the morning and come back to the home evening. So there is a lot of
housework
 left to do. It takes a long
time
 to do.
Thus
, the couple shares and do their
work
 which helps to complete their
housework
 quickly. Thereby, saving their
time
 to spend leisure
time
 effectively.
Besides
, it helps to reduce their stress. In conclusion, sharing the
housework
 among the couple will be easier for
both
 of them in many ways. In view of the above-mentioned ,points I strongly believe sharing household task with
both
men
 and
women
 have more benefits in their life.
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