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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#scientists #tourists #travel #environment #pole #development
Nowadays, thanks to
development
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the development
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 of technology,
scientists
 and
tourists
ave
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have
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opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to go to distant
areas
such
 as the South Pole.
This
 is in my opinion
that
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 cons of
this
 improvement surpass the pros.
Although
 untouched sites provide a new side of investigation for
scientists
;
in addition
a
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new place to visit for
tourists
,
its
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their
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 detrimental effects on
environment
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the environment
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 and
possibility
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 of occurring dangerous events is more important.
Theses
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These
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 will be discussed in detail as follows: The primary
disadvantages
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disadvantage
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 of going to faraway regions
is
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inevitable
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 environmental detriment.
This
 is to say that since
such
areas
 are usually appealing to
scientists
 and
tourists
, it brings a number of people from all over the world to visit and investigate leading to producing garbages,
polluting
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and polluting
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 water and air.
Moreover
, faraway
areas
 might be a threat
for
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to
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 travellers.
In other words
, due to
isolation
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the isolation
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 of
such
 regions,there
is
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are
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 not adequate guidelines for travellers to follow.
For instance
,
tourists
 run the risk of getting attacked by wild animals or the balance of nature can be disturbed by
activities
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the activities
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 of
scientists
.
Finally
, the disadvantages are more significant.
Conversely
, travelling to distant places is a benefit for
tourists
 and
scientists
 as they are able to visit somewhere they have never been before.
Besides
,
scientists
 would be capable of studying
on
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new
areas
. In spite of mentioned positive points, the merits
are overshadows
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are overshadowed
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 by demerits. To sum up, while going to remote sites give a chance
to
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tourists
 and
scientists
 in terms of visiting new
areas
 and exploring scientific subjects, it could
has
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have
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 negative impacts on
environment
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the environment
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 and cause some troubles which totally carry more weight.
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