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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age .punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extend do you agree or disagree whit this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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Talking about the education parents should bring to their
children
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 will be a must for every parent to support their growing
children
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. Punishment is something that
children
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are really hate
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from
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apply
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. But what I want to discuss here
not
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 about that. Rather than talking about punishment, I have a good thing to say about rewards. Saying rewards is more exciting to me in terms of giving
feedbacks
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feedback
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 to
children
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. We have to change the way we say it to our
children
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. Make them happy
children
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 by always giving
reward
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from
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 what they have done. To teach good behaviour,
besides
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 they tell the
children
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 to do so, they have to
do
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the
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apply
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action
of
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on
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 what has been
saying
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said
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This
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 is the best way to teach
children
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 since they tend to imitate our
gesture
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gestures
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 more than our words. I believe by giving them a good example will affect them to change their behaviour and reduces the bad things
happen
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that happen
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