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Nowadays, Obesity is more common in all countries in the world, especially among children. This will lead to more health problems when they grow older. This essay will provide the causes of this problem and solutions.

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Obesity is the
second
most
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leading cause of
health related
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 disease. Lately,
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being over-weight
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over-weight
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overweight
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 is highly recognised
within
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 children in all states in the continent.
This
 is because of
excess
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the excess
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availablity
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availability
 of
food
 items and consumption. To end
this
, parental guidance and awareness are
adviced
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advised
advice
. It is
of
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important to have enough
food
stuffs
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stuff
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 in the house to prevent starvation, but the adverse effect is when the
food
are
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 not properly consumed.
Food
 not rich in nutrients and excess consumption are the primary reason for obesity.
In addition
,
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, in a
reasearch
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research
 article published in Nigeria,
healthy
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a healthy
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 diet should comprise
of
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20% of
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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, 45% of protein, 35percent of vitamins. Parents should monitor their
child
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child's
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 diet intake which is very essential by making a
food
time table
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timetable
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 so as to give the right proportion at the right time.
In addition
, guidance should endeavour to have the right awareness on how to eat healthy
meal
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 by getting related articles. In conclusion, excess foodstuffs and consumption are the leading cause of
over-weight
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being over-weight
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 while parental watchfulness would put a stop to obesity in children
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