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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2020 there may be as many as 32 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is passed almost two hundred years since the
first
 car appeared on British
roads
 in 1888. With time passing, millions of
cars
 have done their appearence in the history of motors development . Now we can say that most of
cars
 in
roads
 don't look like for nothing to the
first
 ones. Obviously, not only
cars
 but
also
 other vehiacles, today, have been introduced in the street of each city,
in particular
, we talk about bus, train, subway, or other public transport. All of these, have permitted to everybody to change ther life style. It's incredible how the world is gone other his beyonds, another once. The same travels that whoever could do in different hours in the past, today that specific time is totally reduced. That's another way by the industrial development, in my opinion, to tell us that the world is changing. Of course, as we said, every possibility to travel ourself, even if for few meters, is changed: nowdays whoever can use or be the owner of a car, but the same thing wasn't mindable if we think, even and only, about one hundred years ago in which only richest families could have one. Unfourtunatly, the more was the number of vehiacles, the more began to become the
accidents
 on
roads
 during the course of years. Today, there are a lot of rules about driving
cars
: most of them have been created rightly in order to limit the moltitude of deaths because of
accidents
 on
roads
. Each year, in Italy, we assit at hundreds of deaths by
accidents
 of
cars
. The governaments might incentivate the respect of traffic rules, maybe beginning just by the schools, by students, learning them what could be the problems related to these situations,
such
 as alcool, wisdomless, drinking before driving. The numbers of
accidents
 is steadily continuing to increase and we can't stay with nothing to do!
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  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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