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Some people say that poor students or students who come from rural areas often find it difficult to have access to university education. What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer. in this space.

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 day and age, it has become the norm for
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 from
rural
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field
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 or people without sufficient financial resources to give up on
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university culture, resulting in a reduction in opportunities for
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 individuals to find jobs with desirable salaries and to improve the quality of their lives.
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 unfortunate circumstances do not befall without cause and for
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 concerning issue, there should
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 be countermeasures, as I will humbly suggest below. Since the high cost of university
education
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 is one of the major obstacles hindering some
students
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 from gaining access to
college
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, a reasonable cutback in
tuition
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fees
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 might be an effective solution to
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 problem.
College
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students
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 typically have to shoulder the burden of paying for transportation, renting and other daily life necessities.
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, having a considerable amount of
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fees
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 added to the list is undoubtedly a considerable challenge which not everyone, especially those bearing financial problems, would take. Under
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 circumstances, downsizing the university
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fees
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 for impecunious
students
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 would be a great encouragement for them to pursue higher
education
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. Another plausible solution to provide more opportunities for rural
students
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 to receive post-secondary
education
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 might be to establish more
universities
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 in their community. The majority of
universities
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 with distinguished
reputation
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 are located in big cities.
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, the trouble of having to travel long distances or live far away from home in order to attend courses might remove the option of going to
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 from these
students
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’ future plans.
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, setting up
universities
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 with standardized lecturers and
curriculum
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 in rural areas would probably encourage
students
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 to apply for colleges. To sum up, financial problems and a shortage of rural
universities
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 are possible explanations
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 poor
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 or
students
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 from rural areas encounter difficulties in having access to
college
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. It is,
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, advisable that there should be a reduction in
tuition
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fees
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 for impoverished
students
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 as well as the foundation of more colleges in rural areas in order to guarantee comprehensive post-secondary
education
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 for anyone who wishes to receive it.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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