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the growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town adn cities closing . do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays , online shopping is becoming more common increasingly and it makes all the shops close. personally , I profoundly agree with
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 of all , due to technological advancements , humans are using the
internet
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 more compare
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 the past for all kinds of their requirements , as illustration , social media ,
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 as Instagram and different websites , so , the
internet
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 plays an essential role in people’s lives these days . Individuals search on the
internet
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 to find and buy all kinds of goods rather than going out . It causes the growth of online shopping . Generally , modern society and new life lead to increasing online shopping . Definitely , it makes some problems ,
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 as the growth of employment and empty stores in towns and cities around the world . People prefer to buy goods online because it is comfortable for them and they are able to compare different prices through the
internet
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 on numerous websites and
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 make a decision to buy suitable selections which adapt to their budget .
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 , they have a wide selection range on the
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 about all the goods and things ,
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 as clothes , food , furniture and kitchen facility . The main important factor is about saving time. People can stay at home without requiring going out . In conclusion , I profoundly agree with
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 opinion . Surely , it should be considered that owners of businesses should check their prices for keeping the high range of their sales .
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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