In spite of the advance made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry, Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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has been used by
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still some area of the country people facing a serious issue of Hunger. at the
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if we see
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populated countries like
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and china they are the largest
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in cultivating rice and sugar cane, even those countries facing
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hunger issues, since the
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proportion
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among the all
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population.
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are doing
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farming with their own
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modern farming and so on,
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lots of private sector farming agencies.
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farmer
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becoming independent job holders, some of those improvising the land and
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cultivation by getting the
advvancement
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advancement
advancements
in farming like education in agriculture. in spite of all hunger needs to be balanced and
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causes,
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monthly training program by the government,
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adoption
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of new technology by young
farmers
. we all should try to have some
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terrace
farming
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our own. again there is
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farmer
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of water, lots of
lands
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are dry in south
africa
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because of no water it goes under non-cultivating. in
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conclution
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just focus on
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commercials
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industrial
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zone. we need a balance solution all
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it would be a joint mission for
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