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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should ne required to work in the country where they did their training, others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Disucss both these views and give your own ooinion.

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Some parts of society believe that it is necessary for
experts
 like doctors and engineers to could work in any country they want but others do not agree with
this
 opinion. I agree with the
second
 comment because education systems are specific and as
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a result their outputs will be different. Governments and officials have their own programmes for their
countries
. To operate these decisions they use
experts
 in various branches and to educate them they prepare special courses to make them ready for their
problems
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in consequence, the contents which teach in college are different in comparison to other
countries
.
For instance
,
countries
 in Africa are faced with diseases which are not common in other continents and academic tutors try to design special courses for their medical students and they will not able to cure diseases in other regions. Universities and colleges
also
 need remarkable budgets and governments provide the money with taxes. People hope their students solve their
problems
 and remove obstacles in their way to progress and it is not reasonable to leave your country. Giving permits for working in other
countries
also
 has advantages.
Firstly
, basics of the science are similar all over the world and they can work in other
countries
,
nevertheless
 the
problems
.
Secondly
, with
this
 method
experts
 will be able to share their thoughts with others and find solutions
for
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 global
problems
. ,
,
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Finally
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 some
countries
 have numerous matters in unemployment
issue
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 and
with
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immigration specialists could have activities in their field and receive suitable wages. In conclusion, the disadvantages overweigh the advantages and government should have rules about using local
experts
 and provide good accommodations for them to keep them in their country.
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