The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

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People became more knowledgeable

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other

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cultures worldwide due to the popularity of mass media and the undemanding international transport. From my point of view, the pros of

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cons.

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of all, one of the cons of

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development is that

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around the world has had a negative influence on the environment.

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, it caused air pollution because of the harmful gases produced by

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. On the other case, the news and media. It could provide the generals with wrong and false information on the intellectual activities done by the country.

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impressions of the nation. It is clear that the advancement has had a few drawbacks.

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, the benefits include increasing the community's education on other

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habits and

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which prepares the individuals into knowing how to behave if they come to a chance to travel to a certain country

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since the television and radio programs provide them with pre-knowledge. In conclusion, the advantages of the spread of different kinds of news all over the globe and ease of transmission outweigh the disadvantages.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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Globalization
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The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

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You are invited to a party, however, because of some reasons you didn’t attend. Write a letter to the friend who invites you: (1) explain the reason why you didn’t go; (2) express your apology; (3) ask about some details in the party.

Most of our information comes from the internet nowadays. Some people say that a large part of the information we get is incorrect. Do you agree or disagree?

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