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The state ofthe environment is now a cause for concern in all countries across the world. Apart from government measures and policies, what can idividuals do on a personal level to combat the negative effect that our lifestyles have on the environment?

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Climate changes are a huge problem for every single country on
the
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Earth. The Government is the
one
 who can change it by law
regulations
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, but individuals can have an influence on the environment, too. Everyone can take action which will reduce environmental problems.
This
 essay will discuss two actions, which can be taken by everyone to combat the negative effects on the planet. Waste sorting is the base of the good Earth’s condition. If the waste is well sorted, it can be recycled and reused
one
 more time.
This
 is how we respect our planet and its resources. It
also
 has an impact on cleaner seas and oceans and
thus
 on the health of the animals who live there. Waste sorting doesn’t take much time, but it can directly affect the improvement of the environment. The
Next
 problem which we can be solved
by
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 individuals is the amount of plastic in the environment which decomposes incredibly long and is toxic to the soil. When you go to the shop, choose a fabric bag
instead
 of the plastic
one
, buy water in a glass bottle or pick
an
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 ecological wooden toothbrush and so on. A single action of
one
 person can’t change a
lot
, but if everyone changes their lifestyles and puts the good of the Earth
first
instead
 of their own comfort, the huge amount of plastic will be eradicated. To conclude,
although
 individuals can’t do a
lot
, it is worth taking to take an action. Try to encourage your friends and family to think about our planet during their daily activities. It usually doesn't take a
lot
 of time, but it can
has
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 an enormous influence. As an
individual
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 we can’t do a
lot
, but as a
group
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 we can change the world.
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