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You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you are selling describe the furniture suggest a date when your friend can come and see the furniture

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Dear Jeet, I am writing to let you know that I am selling some
furniture
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of
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for
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 my house. I thought you would be interested
to buy
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in buying
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 it because once you told me you need that. As you know
that
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apply
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recently, I got
promotion
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a promotion
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 from my company
thus
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 they
shift
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shifted
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 me
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to at
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at
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a
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 new place but they
also
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give
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gave
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 me
staff
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a staff
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 house which would be fully furnished.
Therefore
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 I will not need to bring appliances with me so, I want to clear some
furniture
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in
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for
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 less price. Let me explain the type of
furniture
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 which I would to sell. It is
45 inch
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45-inch
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 television, microwave, dining table and double door fridge which is brand new. If you want to get these things
then
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 you can come on Saturday, 24 December
for having
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to have
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 a look
of
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at
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furniture
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the furniture
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. After
that
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that,
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 I will put it on clearance. Thank you for your consideration. Best regards, Simran

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task achievement
The explanation for why you are selling the furniture could be more detailed. Consider mentioning how the furniture has served you or why it might be valuable to your friend.
coherence
Ensure that every paragraph has a clear focus. You might want to break down the description of the furniture into several sentences, making it easier to read.
task achievement
Your letter has a friendly tone which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
coherence
You've clearly indicated the date for your friend to visit, showing consideration for their schedule.
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