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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#schools #force #children #language
It is suggested that learning a foreign
language
 should not be compulsory at school. From my point of view, I am not in favour of
this
 assumption because I believe
foreign
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language
 has numerous merits. When it comes to personal advantages,
i
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 suppose that a new
language
 helps people to widen their knowledge and sharpen their skills. There are a variety of specialized documents on the internet.
However
, most of them are written in
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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languages
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, particularly
english
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. Only when
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internet users learn that
language
, are these materials beneficial to them.
Furthermore
, studying new communication
tool
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 can polish many skills of students,
such
 as confidence, critical thinking and so on.
As a result
, pupils will have a better skill set for their career as well as their life in the future.
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 to the above benefits,
i
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also
 think that learning
foreign
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language
 should be compulsory at school due to the fact that it can improve our community and our country. Our young generation will be the leaders of our nation soon and only a leader who
know
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 other languages are able to make the country better by international trading or cooperating with other countries.
Moreover
, if people know
foreign
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language
, they can improve
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tourism in the country.
Therefore
 teaching other languages is hugely important for
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society.
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 all the
reason
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reasons
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 into account, I strongly disagree with the idea of not forcing
pupil
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pupils
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 to study
foreign
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language
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languages
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, because it has a lot of benefits for each
individuals
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 and
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society as a whole.
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