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These days, in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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Today, with the emergence of many new curious occupations, teaching has been a less attractive job in many places of the world. As a consequence, the trend of becoming educators is declining day by day.
This
 essay will discuss why
this
 might be the case and how
this
 problem can be alleviated. One of the main causes of the problem is that the monthly salaries of the teacher are very poor compared to other jobs. They earn differently even if they are in the same field.
For example
, an average programmer will earn far more than an average teacher of computer science. The solution is to increase salaries and offer the best working conditions to attract people to the state. Another significant aspect is prestige. A respectful attitude of society to
this
 job has been lost in recent years.
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