To succeed in business, one needs to learn and know math. To what extent do you agree pr disagree?

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business
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, people require to have knowledge
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mathematics. According to my experiences, math is one of many factors that lead to the success of
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and I partly agree with the statement.
First
of all, math is extremely important in
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, it is related to
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and
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the progress of any employment.
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, every single company or corporation need accountants to calculate the money flows, control
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and divide it
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different group for particular use like money for
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salary,
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maintenance fees, wage costs, profit or future investment, one more important use of mathematic among
business
is to avoid money loss and overspend. Math
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important in report
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especially simplify huge data of
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, the point is to improve
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system.
on the other hand
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important in
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goal achievement.
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company should have communication skills to build a relationship
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successful people in order to get
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or help in financial.
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, they must have consistency and
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to do anything to achieve their goals.
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interpersonal
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, they need to understand other people feeling and thinking.
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, understanding their employees and customers to make a great, strong relationship will make them stick to your
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to survive and succeed
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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