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Many businesses choose to recruit from within their own company rather than sourcing staff from overseas. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many employers tend to select
staff
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 from their own companies and communities
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 of hiring outsiders. In
this
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 essay, I would be discussing the pros and cons of the recruitment of employees from within the
company
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 and how the drawbacks of
this
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 method of selection outweigh the advantages. The mere advantages of recruiting a person from within the organization are,
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, employers are already familiar with the
staff
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 and
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, businesses can introduce the promotion system in the
company
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. When an employer is already aware of the previous knowledge and
experience
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 of his
company
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 member,
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 he would not be afraid of his capabilities and their cooperation level would be high.
This
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 approach will motivate other
staff
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members
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 to perform well as they will consider themselves to be in the right place where the chances of growth are sufficient.
For example
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, Getz pharmaceutical
company
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 has devised a process for the recruitment of top positions where they promote their internal
staff
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instead
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 of importing an outsider.
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, sourcing a member from overseas based on his qualifications and
experience
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 could lead a business to new heights. These employees tend to have more sense of responsibility as compared to the locals as they have a point to prove. Their vast multinational
experience
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 proves to be the x-factor in an organization and they push other
members
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also
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 to do their best for the
company
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’s growth.
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, Pakistan Cricket Board has hired Mathew Hayden for the T20 world cup in order to get more benefits from his knowledge.
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, they performed exceptionally well in that tournament. To put it in a nutshell,
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 recruiting local
members
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 to your business could enhance cooperation and feeling of satisfaction in other
members
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 the
experience
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 and work ethics of an outsider outclass the advantages significantly.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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