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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe that it’s good to have friend who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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although
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more effective to make
friends
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ideas
, some other people are against it.
This
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friends
. Those who are in
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 of having mates same opinion bring up that it prevents discussions and fights.
In other words
, two
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same
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ideas
 on an issue may have better communication
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 other. Another reason that making
friends
 same opinions is that it develops
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 of
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treatment
trusting
. Namely, if people have
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ideas
, they might trust each other.
For example
, students who live
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together
 have better communications thanks to their same opinions.
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ideas
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 seem reasonable
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 the views of its supporters.
On the other hand
, those who support
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 different
ideas
friends
 pose that it gaines different perspectives.
In other words
, if a person
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 variety
opinion
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friends
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, his vision may grow.
In addition
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this
, having different
ideas
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 can ensure more social skills. According to some studies, people who have
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 of
friends
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 private and social lives.
Hence
, having different
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 are more
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 way. In conclusion,
although
 both views have merits, those opting to be against each other, but making different
ideas
friends
 is more reasonable to me. I believe that if we keep doing
this
 option, it will be better for our society.
Submitted by orhanveli2006 on

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