These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Currently, a great number of people have
chance
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to
work
at
home
with the help of their own computer and telephone. It is hard to deny that working at
home
saves a certain amount of
time
of
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transportation, and
such
a fact leads impressionable people to generate the opinion that the advantages of working at
home
overweight the disadvantages.
However
such
a statement suffers from both logical and factual fallacies, and it should be examined meticulously. As far as the balance of
work
and
life
, friendship of colleagues and the effectiveness of working are concerned, I strongly hold that working at
home
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more negative impacts than positive.
First
and foremost, working at
home
can impinge on employees’ private
life
, as
such
an act mix both space and
time
of
work
and
life
together. To be more specific, the starting and ending
time
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times
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become confused, when employees choose to
work
at
home
, leading employers to misunderstand the process of
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the project
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and assign more than 8-hour
task
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tasks
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.
Therefore
, the workload is increasing and the balance
of
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work
and
life
is broken.
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, the fact that the employees who
work
at
home
fail to build
the
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relationship with colleagues and supervisors, and
finally
lose the chance of promotion indicates that working together with others in the same space counts. Take the case of a famous social media company, Twitter, whose new CEO found that the task of the whole company can be completed by only 50 people working in the office while there are 500 employees working at
home
via
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. He dismissed them and gave
higher
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a higher
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salary
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to those who worked in the office, saving a great number of the output of the company.
Nevertheless
, a voice arises that since a certain amount of
time
of
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transportation can be saved, working at
home
appears to be more effective. Ironically, teamwork is a sure shoot for increasing productivity and the key fact of teamwork is communicating face to face. Teammates can see others’
face
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or sketches when working at the same
time
and
the
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same place, making
discussion
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more convenient and direct.
Therefore
, the
time
saved by direct teamwork absolutely overweight the
time
spent on transportation. In a nutshell, I maintain that the negative impacts of working at
home
overweight the positive ones as
such
an act damages the balance of
work
and
life
and
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no contribution to
friendship
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the friendship
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of colleagues and
effectiveness
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the effectiveness
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of working. It seems to me that, working together offline to achieve
the
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common goals is a new working trend acknowledged by various great companies.
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