These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Nowadays, with the
widely
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usage of personal computers and mobile phones, it seems to be kind of convenient for us to
working
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at
home
without going to
office
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. For many
people
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they can finish and transmit via
Internet
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.
However
, there are both pros and cons to deciding to do
this
. In
this
essay, I will illustrate the reasons why working at
home
as well as some challenges to be overcome. Let’s begin by looking at the advantages of working at
home
. One of the main positives
is save
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the
time
of transporting. What I mean by
this
is that we usually need a certain amount of
time
to travel from our
home
to
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.
For instance
, when meeting the traffic jam,
this
time
will be double even treble. So
this
can make you use the transporting
time
to do other things you want.
Secondly
, doing the job at
home
can be convenient to balance
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work and family. Today, many employees
are
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suffer from the influence of working overtime
that
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they ignore their
family
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.
However
, if working at
home
, accompanying
with
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their family is not that
a
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far distance because
that
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can chat with the older or play with their children. The strength of
family
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can increase
the
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working efficiency as well. Turning to the other side of the argument, one of the
drawback
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is that being separate will reduce the sense of belonging and cohesion. To be more precise,
this
is not good for the unity of the company. Why the company often organize some activities
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because
this
can promote
the
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familiarity, which is exactly opposite to the influence
of
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at
home
.
This
often cannot lead to a real “team”. Another issue is that the efficiency is not that good compared
with in
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office
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.
In other words
, people
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home
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are usually lazier, who
is
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easy to be disturbed and cannot focus on
the
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work. If considering
to
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the
company
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profit, working at
home
can lower
the
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efficiency. All things considered, doing
job
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at
home
has both benefits and drawbacks. When it comes to
this
problem, both pros and cons should be in consideration. Personally, I believe the benefits in terms of traffic convenience and family companionship eventually outweigh any negatives.
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