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The rising numbers of health diseases among the population are believed to be connected to the striking amount of sugar In the inside of industrial foods and drinks.

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The rising numbers of health diseases among the population are believed to be connected to the striking
amount
 of
sugar
 In the inside of industrial foods and drinks. I can confirm that I
am totally agree
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 that the increased
price
 for
the
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apply
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sweet
products
 can
effect
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affect
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 human’s desire to consume
this
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this product
these products
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products
.
Firstly
, I suggest that the
skyrocked
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skyrocketed
skyrocket
sugar
 prices can decline manufacturers’ interest in adding
the
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sugar
 or artificial sweeteners
inside
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to
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 the huge
rage
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range
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 of edible
products
 which will decrease the
amount
 of
sugar
 eaten by the citizens . It is lucid that nowadays we can find
sugar
in
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on
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 the inside of nearly all kinds of edible
product
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products
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, starting with pasta and ending with water. And
possible
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a possible
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 tax on
sugar
products
 can delay companies from adding it everywhere, as it, will definitely result in making the
price
 enormously high.
For example
, the possible growth of chips’ cost because of forcible tax on
sugar
 consisting
products
 would eventually reduce the
sale
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sales
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 numbers. We can claim that making
sugar
 consisting
products
 extremely expensive will
effect
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affect
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its
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their
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 contribution
in
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to
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 the food industry which will lead
us
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apply
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to
the
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a
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 decline in the annual
amount
 of
sugar
 used by
customers’
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customers
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.
Secondly
, presumably
rise
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a rise
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 in
price
 can erase some
products
 from the weekly shopping lists of many human beings, as the distribution of budget would change towards the
products
 which can at adequate
price
 provide the needed
amount
 of
nutritions
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nutrition
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 for
person
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a person
the person
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. For better
understanding
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,understanding
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 we can take an imaginary family with the budget for
week
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the week
a week
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. If
the
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a
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 family of three
use
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used
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 to spend 3/5 of their budget on
the
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apply
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products
 consisting
the
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of the
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 comparative
amount
 of
sugar
, they will reduce the
percent
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per cent
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 of
this
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these
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products
 as their
prise
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price
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 starts to move up.
Otherwise
 will not be able to buy
more
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apply
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sufficient
for
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apply
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life goods
such
 as vegetables, meat and so on. The urge to prioritize food that important for our
existing
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existence
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 will eventually force
human
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humans
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 to drop the percentage of consumed
sugar
. Can we claim that
tax
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a tax
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 on
sugar
 or
sugar
 consisting goods will be beneficial for our society in the long term? I confirm that the expensive
sugar containing
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sugar-containing
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products
 would be less demanded
as for
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by
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 manufacturers
as
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apply
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for customers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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