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Nowadays almost every student who graduates from high school tries to attend college or university. Why do you think people attend college or university?

#student #graduates #school #college #university #people
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time
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 almost every student who graduates from lofty school tries to attend
college
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 or
university
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. In my opinion, every student goes to
college
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 or
university
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. Because they have to get
education
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an education
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 and
work
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 after graduation. I will put my thoughts into words in the forthcoming paragraphs. Every year many students in
all
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 world attend
college
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 or
university
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. There are different reasons
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this
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. All of
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this
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these
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 people try to develop themselves in
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apply
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college
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. But I do not think that the time spent in
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apply
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college
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 is lost time. Some people go to
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college
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 because they like to learn. Usually
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this
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these
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 students continuos their education and win awards in
sciens
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science
. They have a good
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chance
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 to express
a good learning possibilities
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good learning possibilities
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. Nowadays, it is easy for people with fluency to find a job. In my opinion, everyone should go to school,
college
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,
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university
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and university
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. Because their life will be better if everything is fine. If they do not go to
college
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 or
university
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 it is very difficult to
work
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 there. You
also
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 need to read to
work
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. A person who does not flow now cannot
work
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. For
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, English teachers cannot
work
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. Because they cannot
work
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 without certification. All teachers must be
certification
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. Only
then
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 it will be easy for them to find a job.
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 why you need to go to
college
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 or
university
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. You need to learn more. In conclusion, all students need to go to
college
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 or
university
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, because they need to study in order to
work
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.
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