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Nowadays almost every student who graduates from high school tries to attend college or university. Why do you think people attend college or university?

At the present
time
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 almost every student who graduates from
lofty
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high
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 school tries to attend
college
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 or
university
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. In my opinion, every student goes to
college
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 or
university
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. Because they have to get
education
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an education
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 and
work
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 after graduation. I will put my thoughts into words in the forthcoming paragraphs. Every year many students in
all
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the
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 world attend
college
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 or
university
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. There are different reasons
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this
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. All of
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this
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these
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 people try to develop themselves in
the
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apply
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college
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. But I do not think that the time spent in the
college
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 is lost time. Some people go to
the
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apply
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college
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 because they like to learn. Usually
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this students
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this student
these students
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continuos
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continue
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 their education and win awards in
sciens
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science
. They have a good
change
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chance
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 to express
a good learning possibilities
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good learning possibilities
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. Nowadays, it is easy for people with fluency to find a job. In my opinion, everyone should go to school,
college
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,
university
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. Because their life will be better if everything is fine. If they do not go to
college
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 or
university
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 it is very difficult to
work
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 there. You
also
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 need to read to
work
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. A person who does not flow now cannot
work
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. For
examples
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, English teachers cannot
work
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. Because they cannot
work
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 without certification. All teachers must be
certification
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. Only
then
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 it will be easy for them to find a job.
That is
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 why you need to go to
college
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 or
university
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. You need to learn more. In conclusion, all students need to go to
college
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 or
university
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, because they need to study in order to
work
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.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your main idea. It should explain why people attend college or university.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your ideas more clearly. Use linking words such as 'first', 'next', 'last'.
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Use more specific examples to support your points. This will make your ideas stronger.
task achievement
You express a clear opinion on the importance of attending college or university.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your main point well.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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