As global trade increases, many goods including those we use on a daily basis are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distance.  Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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These days, the importance of worldwide trade rises up. Many
products
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which consumer use regularly are manufactured in other countries, leading to these must be transported long distance. The main reason why the process is going like
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companies want to make more profit thanks to
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. I strongly believe that
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advantage far outweighs any potential disadvantage
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the pollution which
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system caused. On one hand, there must use vehicles
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,
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trucks
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, and
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planes
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to carry
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among the countries.
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can lead to serious air pollution because of releasing
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CO2
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the atmosphere.
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, when
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transport
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by ship or plane, these are harmful to the mechanism of
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piece
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pieces
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of information during
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animal migration.
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, I disagree with the statement since these problems can be tackled by using renewable energy resources and not transporting
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the migration period.
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, companies promote
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incident, which
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to high profit for them. Some
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can easily be manufactured
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cost in certain areas. Despite the cost of transporting expenditure, companies import these goods since if they strive to produce certain goods
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ownselves
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ourselves
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, production
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would be
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higher.
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, the biggest amount of
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chips
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is produced in Taiwan and even
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the most popular technology brands
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as Samsung or Apple buy chips from Taiwan
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this
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way is more profitable for their benefits. In
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conclusion
, whether buying some daily basis goods which are produced in other countries and transporting these long distance is advantageous or not. In my point of view, when we look at the total picture, it is more affordable for manufacturers even though transporting process gives rise to pollution problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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