What is your opinion about the advantages of smoking cigarettes?

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Based on my experiences

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asking those people who

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to cigarettes, they said that smoking

give

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them a relaxing feeling,

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mind and even brighter ideas.

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their lungs,

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they got a new life to live. I believe that it is the fact for the doers of smoking cigarettes,

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will definitely get

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for a moment. These are the advantages that will give them a new way of life. Relaxation and

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mind are the two side

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that I hear always from

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smokers. They argued without

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will , they are not as

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as when they

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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