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What is your opinion about the advantages of smoking cigarettes?

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Based on my experiences
about
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asking those people who
addicted
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 to cigarettes, they said that smoking
give
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 them a relaxing feeling,
fresh
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 mind and even brighter ideas.
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, by inhaling
a smoke
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smoke
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to
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 their lungs,
as if
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they got a new life to live. I believe that it is the fact for the doers of smoking cigarettes,
they
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will definitely get
these sensation
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 for a moment. These are the advantages that will give them a new way of life. Relaxation and
fresh
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 mind are the two side
affects
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effects
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 that I hear always from
the
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smokers. They argued without
smoking
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a smoking
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 will , they are not as
encouraging
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 as when they
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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