What is your opinion about the advantages of smoking cigarettes?

Based on my experiences
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asking those people who
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to cigarettes, they said that smoking
give
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them a relaxing feeling,
fresh
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mind and even brighter ideas.
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their lungs,
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they got a new life to live. I believe that it is the fact for the doers of smoking cigarettes,
they
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will definitely get
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for a moment. These are the advantages that will give them a new way of life. Relaxation and
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mind are the two side
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that I hear always from
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smokers. They argued without
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will , they are not as
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as when they
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