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Many countries are experiencing serious problems with their environment, with pollution of their land, water and air. Problem Solution essay

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Almost every country in the world has problems with the environment ,affecting its land , air or water . I believe the main problems on land are global warming , soil erosion, building in rural areas, deforestation and litter on the streets. These troubles can be diverse effects on the earth .Perhaps, the most helpful and useful thing we can do to tackle these difficulties is to refuse to give planning permission for new apartment blocks, in view of the fact in these cases much land is decreasing .
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 our nature is damaged.
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 of plastic bags. The ways in which air is affected are as follows,
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 of all, toxic fumes , which are produced by cars and other types of transportation. These troubles influence our atmosphere . These poison obstacles can be caused lots of illnesses ,
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 enlarging flora and fauna . The main effect of pollution and other environmental troubles on the water are contaminated rivers , acid rain , and droughts and the main problem is global warming . For ,instance most people throw rubbish and litter in the rain in
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 belt-tightening.These can be dealt with by using a renewable form of energy or declining waste and recycling rubbish . It is crucial that these measures are taken in order to ensure a healthy future for our planet
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecosystem
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • emissions
  • deforestation
  • conservation
  • biodiversity
  • regulatory standards
  • composting
  • urban sprawl
  • green technologies
  • environmental degradation
  • waste management
  • pollutants
  • non-biodegradable
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