Many people think it is better for the students to have a part-time job while they are studying.

Nowadays many students have a
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time
job
while they are studying. I believe that it is better for us as students to have a
job
for many reasons that I will show in
this
essay. To start with, having
part
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time
job
will help you to manage your
time
.
For instance
, if you used to manage your
time
between work and study it will be easier for you in the future, to make it more clear, when you get married and have kids you will need to manage your
time
for both
sides
.
Moreover
, having
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job
will make you gain a lot of skills and good experiences that you are in need
for
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if you start working now after graduation you will be ready for
the
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full
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time
job
.
Although
everything in life has two
sides
. having
part
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time
job
while studying may affect you on some
sides
,
such
as difficulties in having free
time
, you will not have enough
time
to hang out with your friends or your family. But again having a
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time
job
will help you in many ways.
Such
as you will have your own money so you will be able to pay for your courses without worrying about your family
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they can pay for you or not. To sum up, having
part
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time
job
is a good thing but you need to have a look at
the
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both
sides
before you go to apply for a
job
.
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