ın a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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consider that a great amount of
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railways, some other
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on developing public transport systems.
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argument and I will give my own perspective which is for spending on train lines. Those who are in favour of spending
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railways bring up that it ensures faster and easier
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,
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who use the new technology
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systems can go easily
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works places and houses. Another reason
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phenomenon is that it provides more job and
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who use the fast trains may find easily new
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and houses thanks to
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improvement.
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, in London,
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the railway
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system is very expanded, so
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, spending more
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to construct
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lines seems reasonable based on the views of its supporters.
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public transport pose that it is
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method than
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fast train roads. The
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argument for
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idea is that public buses may reach anywhere more easily in the city.
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of these circumstances, even
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railway
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the railway
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system is faster, most population choose the bus travelling.
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, old
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buses travels
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because it is cheaper and easy for them.
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, these supporters consider that
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money
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should be spent to develop public transport systems. In conclusion,
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both views have merits, those opting to be for
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train lines are more reasonable to me, I believe that if we keep doing railways, it will be good for our society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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