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Young people do not care about elderly people they are hiring professionals for caring them. Is it postive or negative development

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It Is
frequent
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 topic of discussion that possible requisite skills to cater for older relatives.
This
 essay will discuss the specific aspects of
this
 new trend and I will give my opinion about it. It is alleged that
modern
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 young community do not take responsibility
of
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for
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 their parents.
As a result
of
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apply
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some families forget
substantial
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the substantial
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 values
which
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apply
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about
of
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apply
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their family
relationship
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relationships
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. Personally, I think all Islamic countries take responsibility
of
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for
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 family members.
Therefore
 in
this
 religion, the importance of parents
are
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 incomparable.
First
, they believe that they
also
 fall into
this
 condition when they are aged.
Second
, ageing comes with the need for
many
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 attention, medical service and love. In conclusion, If people want to live together with their elderly members, they would have appreciated the value of life more and would have been more attentive to
his
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their
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 actions.
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