A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
letter in concern with the sponsorship, your company is planning, in my area. The Soccer
team
of our high school is qualifying for nationals consistently, and they deserve a sponsor to
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their needs
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sporting
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.
Also
, the Basketball
team
is performing excellently in the ongoing tournament, and they need to renovate their existing court, as the current flooring has gone rough. If you can sponsor either of those teams, it would help children to improve their skills and it will give them a chance to play for the national
team
.
Moreover
, It can
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help our city
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gaining more popularity, which will bring more tourism.
On the other hand
, concerts could be a great way to support local musicians and bands. We have an exceptional flute player, who needs money in organizing a concert in the town and your sponsorship could help him do that.
Also
, it would be very beneficial if you can support the bands to organize a concert, as people can get together after 2 years of
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, due to the
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pandemic. I believe,
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concerts are entertaining, you should spend money
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sponsoring a sports
team
, because it will help children to achieve their dream. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Vimal Thakkar
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sponsor
  • sportsmanship
  • fosters
  • cultivates
  • talents
  • accessible
  • cultural entertainment
  • boosts
  • tourism
  • temporary employment opportunities
  • patron of the arts
  • community engagement
  • long-term impact
  • economic benefits
  • alternating support
  • maximize community impact
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