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Today more and more tourists are visiting Places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.What are the benefit and disadvantage for tourists who visit such places?

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In general, the chart witnessed an upward trend in using
internet
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 in all
age
groups
 over
years
.
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, 16-24
years
 old used
internet
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 the most compared to other
age
groups
. Especially, 65+
years
 old didn’t use the
internet
 in 2003 and contained
fewest
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users
. The number of UK citizens who enjoyed using the
internet
 increased
overtime
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. In detail, we can see that
users
in
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 the
age
 of 16 to 24 started at 80%
users
 in 2003 and stayed the same in 2004,
then
 reached it
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 in 2005 with 100% before
dropped
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 to 90%
users
 in 2006. Followed by 2
age
of
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groups
 25 to 44 and 45 to 54, there is no significant
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 between these
age
groups
, 25 to 44
years
 old had 45% of
users
 in 2003 while 45 to 54 had 60%, the
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 rate in both
age
groups
 climbed up to 80% in 2005. 55 to 64
years
 old people used the
internet
 increased from 2003 to 2006, the percentage is 23%, 30%, 25% and 45% respectively. There was no data recorded for 65+ people in 2003, but in 3
next
years
, the user percentage
also
 increased like other
age
groups
 with 17% in 2004, 16% in 2005 and 20% in 2006. In 2005, the figure for
Internet
users
 at the
age
 of 16 to 24 reached a remarkable 100%, it is the highest of any
age
 group, in any year, before a drop to 90% in 2006. Meanwhile, the percentage of
Internet
users
 in the remaining
age
groups
 saw similar increases to 80% (the 25-to-44 and the 45-to-54), 50% (the 55-to-64), and 20% (the 65+).
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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