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It's time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It's a social experiment that hasn't worked and it's time to say goodbye. To what extent, do you agree to the above statement.

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Is it really time to ban social
media
? I somewhat agree with the statement. I agree with the fact that the way a social network is being used today has affected lives from all over the world to geopolitics. Social
media
 can be both boon and a bane depending on how people intend to utilize it. Let's discuss how social
media
 has impacted a normal person's life. Most social applications have become a medium to defraud people and impersonate others to harm their peaceful life. One worrying thing about these apps is the amount of personal information
that is
 being gathered and stored by these huge technology companies.
Furthermore
, a data leak of
this
 data can have an adverse effect on people's lives. Recently, for over 100k individuals in India, hackers got access to their private data.
Besides
 the common man's life, politics has been adversely affected by social sites, most popularly Twitter. Nowadays, political leaders tend to write anything harming the values of the nation using Twitter which can cause chaos all around the world.
Additionally
, social platforms have become a source for the community to spread disinformation which leads to unwanted protests and disturbs the peace of the country.
Moreover
, another trick being used via the internet community is to self-image someone to be a godly figure which tends to misguide society about their true character.
Therefore
, I would like to conclude by supporting the statement made above and prefer a ban on social
media
 sites to make the lives of the public more stress-free, and a world where there is one less source of spreading hate.
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