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The bar chart illustrates the European young generations expect to change in the
next
 20 years within 5 different sections including
Health
, Air
quality
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Quality
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, Water
quality
, Food
quality
 and
People
 communication. In general, there was no high expectation for
future
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the future
a future
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youngster
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youngsters
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 to improve in most areas.
In addition
,
people
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people's
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 communication
expectation
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expectations
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 had
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a noticeable
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noticeable
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noticeably
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improve
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improvement
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 in
next
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the next
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 20 years whereas Air
quality
expected
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was expected
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 to become worse. European young generations tend to
had
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have
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a
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apply
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bad
health
 in
next
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the next
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 20 years, the percentage of
Health
 will become worse was 60% while it is only 40% of surveyed
people
 thought
future’s
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the future’s
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 young generation’s
health
 to improve.
Next
 up is Air
quality
, the hope for it to be better in the future was only 20%, much lower than the
quantity
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number
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 of
people
 expected it to develop in a negative way.
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