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The bar chart illustrates the European young generations expect to change in the
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quality
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, Water
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 communication. In general, there was no high expectation for
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youngster
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 to improve in most areas.
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people
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expectation
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noticeable
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 20 years whereas Air
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expected
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 to become worse. European young generations tend to
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a
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bad
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 20 years, the percentage of
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 will become worse was 60% while it is only 40% of surveyed
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the future’s
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 to improve.
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 up is Air
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, the hope for it to be better in the future was only 20%, much lower than the
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 of
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 expected it to develop in a negative way.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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