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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation , such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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Some people argue that it is the best way to accept a bad situation
such
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 as an unsatisfactory job or
shortage
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a shortage
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 of money. Others believe that it is better to try and improve
such
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 situations. I will explain both views and many more explanations that are related
with
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to
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 those views. Bad situations are inevitable conditions in human life. We can not predict that
condition
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 in the future but we can anticipate
such
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 a mass layoff.
Mass
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 layoff is
that
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a
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condition
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 that we can not predict but we can figure out the financial
condition
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in
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of
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our
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the
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 company that we work for. As a clear
illustration
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 we can see the revenue and cost of the product. Potentially, the company might stand for unstable conditions for 3 months,
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however
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 if the company has a great amount of money to allocate
such
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 an emergency fund could be longer than 3 months.
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, others have an opposing view on that.They assume that
condition
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 is not the
condition
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 to give up.
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, it is the way to be more productive because they have to evaluate their competency, capability and
self evaluation
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 that might help to improve their social status. Apart from that, an individual should have a huge motivation to develop himself and it might make
feels
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him feels
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 stressed.
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, to maintain that stress people have to have high tolerance because most people become stubborn to pursue anything that they want to achieve. In my point of view, there are cons and pros
in
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at
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 every stage.
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, if I could choose, I would choose to improve that situation. That seems to be easy for me even though I have to do extra work or supplement my skills in terms of expecting to get
higher
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a higher
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 income.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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