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The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world has made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

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Nowadays, the development of travelling abroad and the increasing of numerous types of
internets
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internet
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 like Facebook, TikTok, Instagram, YouTube, etc., prompt
people
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 to experience the livelihood and culture of other
people
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 worldwide. In my opinion, I totally agree with
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 viewpoint. Regarding advantages, it is undeniable that international travel and mass
media
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 has influenced positively
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human life.
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,
travelers
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travellers
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 can have several fascinating experiences of cuisines and cultures.
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, when American tourists come to Vietnam, they would have an opportunity to use chopsticks, enjoy traditional meals and.
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, the mass
media
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 can help
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also
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 acknowledge other customs if they cannot afford to go abroad. Both
traveling
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 overseas and the internet could make enormous profits for governments and enhance life qualities.
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, these means are
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 not beneficial for many
people
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 around the world. Increasing air traffic, trains and cruises cause a great deal of environmental pollution and
quick
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 spreading of contagious diseases. To illustrate, In 2019, the Covid -
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firstly
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 found in Wuhan, China,
rapidly
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and rapidly
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 spread worldwide
by
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 international traffic.
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, when more
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 visit famous historical places, they may cause some damage to the monuments or
artifacts
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.
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, the Internet as a form of
media
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 opens possibilities of imposters, fraud and hacking. Obviously,
media
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 can be addictive,
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 as some television programs and the internet, which can lead to a decrease in
people
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’s productivity. In conclusion, I think that the disadvantages of international
traveling
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 and mass
media
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 certainly do not outweigh the advantages. Modern techniques and
media
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 are better than before for each other than we had in the past.

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