Many of the problems that people are experiencing in today’s world are due to the fact that we have a very sedentary lifestyle. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, more and more people

work

as white collar and can do their job comfortably in

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.

However

, some people claimed that

this

situation directly causes many kinds of diseases. In my opinion, I disagree with

this

viewpoint because there are other reasons that affect our health more directly. In the following essay, I will show some reasons and explain my view. It is argued that working

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office

jobs can be

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main

reason

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getting diseases. The

reason

is that the workers need to sit on the

office

chair for almost 8 hours and keep staring at the computer all day long.

Thus

, they don’t have enough opportunity to stretch their body and relax. So, it can be easy for them to gain weight and cannot release their stress by moving their body and resting their eyes.

Moreover

, because of the improvement

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technology, we use

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computer

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to

work

a lot, and

this

will let our shoulders uncomfortable and easy to gain shoulder pain.

Nevertheless

, I think the straight

reason

of

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getting

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the illness

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illness

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is the lifestyle we take.

This

means if we can take care of ourselves

then

whether we

work

in the

office

or do physical jobs, we can maintain our health.

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, the white collars can

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exercise after

work

, take a quick rest during

the

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work

, and

also

choose healthy food

instead

of junk food.

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these kinds of

lifestyle

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is

the

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good way to prevent us from getting sick. In conclusion, I strongly believe the main

reason

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getting

illness

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depends on if we keep our lifestyle healthy or not. Even if we need to

work

very

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long time in

office

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, we still can maintain our health.