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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? In about 300 words, give examples to support your ideas.

#people #attention #support
Nowadays, commercial campaigns reach a lot of
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 thanks to
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 technology world
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boosting
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into
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 individuals' daily life. A number of
people
 believe that advertisement is enormously accomplished at convincing
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comunity
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community
 to purchase things,
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whereas
, others support that advertising is so prevalent that individuals no longer pay attention to it. From my perspective, there are many reasons why it
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 a major
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people
's shopping decision in today's
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world
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. To start with, the most important aspect of
commercials
 is that it creates a perception
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people
's
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. Individuals are exposed to
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thousands of
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publicity that are
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consciously
 edited
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every
. There is no doubt that they affect these advertisements because big advertisers
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society
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in society
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 that these brands are
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indispensable
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 for them.
Thus
,
people
 believe that brands reflect their personal characteristics and
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. For
this
 reason,
commercials
 determine
people
's purchasing habits.
Secondly
, another foremost factor of advertising is that it
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 companies to increase their revenues. Each
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 have a profit target. They benefit
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from commercials
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 to reach
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these goals.
For example
, companies
such
 as Amazon which have a big wealth advertise on several digital platforms. To sum up, whether advertising is
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successful
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people
's shopping or not is a debatable issue. There are different
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opinions
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 on
this
 matter.
Nevertheless
, ı am inclined to believe that
commercials
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 unimaginable impact
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 consumers.
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