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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, fast
food
 is getting more popular among
the
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people
 around the world. Hamburger, pizza, hot dog, and french fries... We eat many kinds of fast
food
 every day.
However
, in some countries, a huge number of
people
 are facing
health
 problems due to its overuse. Some
people
 think that a higher tax should be imposed on junk
foods
 and I agree with them.  To start with, its impact on our human
health
 is more hazardous than we think.
First
 of all, it's the main cause of obesity. These days,
people
 are concerned about obesity and still searching some ways to keep fit again.
For instance
, in the US,
where
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 is the biggest fast
food
 consumer, almost 70% of
grown-up
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 population suffer from
overweight
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.
Besides
, it's followed by a number of diseases,
such
 as diabetes, heart attack and back hurt. Jack, my best friend, said once that he was regretting that he had eaten junk
foods
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 every time he went out and
as a result
 of
this
, he was suffering from diabetes.
Furthermore
, it affects our mental
health
.
In other words
, it makes
people
 addicted and it's the reason why we want to eat more after eating fast
food
.  On the other side, it changes our lifestyle and makes us lazier. We usually eat these
foods
 when we are lazy to cook and prepare
for
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it
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. Most young couples decide to order some fast
foods
,
such
 as pizza, and fried chicken, rather than making their dinner themselves.
Consequently
, we will be dependent on fast
foods
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food
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.  Other
people
 argue that there is no need to put a higher tax on
these kind
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 of
foods
 because it is
iur
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our
 right to select what we eat and it saves our time.
However
, do they really know about its noticeable effects on their
health
?
Although
 it has many advantages, is
health
 the most significant asset for us?  All in all, fast
food
 is being consumed by plenty of
people
 and the circumstance is getting exacerbated by its overuse.
Therefore
, a higher tax on junk
foods
 is compulsive, is not it?
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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