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some people think its better to choode friends who always have the same opinions as them . other people believe its good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. discuss both this views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals believe that making
friends
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 who agree with them has more benefits rather than those who disagree. In
this
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 essay , both sides of the argument will be analyzed and a logical conclusion will be drawn.
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 of all , choosing
friends
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 who always have the same opinions leads to long-term friendships usually , because they have the same ideas about different topics,
such
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 as choosing a field at university or choosing a job . Generally , they agree together in many things . they can speak about similar subjects for some hours and solve their problem easily . they adapt in many cases ,
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 if they want to travel , they agree about choosing where and when they go and
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 what they do there even whatever they eat . Definitely , they are able to spend time and have fun in their friendship , because they have similar interests in hobbies which are good reasons for a start long friendship .
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 , if humans make
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 that they always agree with them and do not argue with, I believe that it has some disadvantages because they can not learn more things . In fact , their minds are limited when all
friends
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 agree with them if people try to communicate with their
friends
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 who disagree , they are challenged and sometimes they have to get better and more effective decisions . it leads to more success . when they know new opinions , their life improves . they can find more solutions for solving their problems and usually they provide advanced lives . To sum up , personally , I profoundly believe that
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 making
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 who agree with you
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 more enjoyable , positive disagreement has more benefits
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invaluable
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 friendship .
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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