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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In the twentieth one centuries,
Smartphones
 play a huge contribution in our daily lives. Due to the fact that they are easy to access and useful for many people,
smartphones
 became undetachable
from
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 our daily lives which widely affects people, including
children
. At the present, parenting doesn't look the same as it was in the 1960s. Some
children
 got
smartphones
 before they got a book.
Children
 spend many hours on their
smartphones
 only because Their parents are irresponsible and ignorant of what might happens to
children
 if they spend too much
time
 on it. In
this
 case, parents might think that
smartphones
 can be their child's friend. Basically, they let a child be with a smartphone in order for them to be free from parenting
such
 as
spend
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 quality
time
 with their
children
, etc. In my opinion on
this
 matter, I believe that it is going to be a bad impact rather than a good one. It will probably be a negative development for
this
 young generation who grows up with
smartphones
, and not their father, mother, or/and some proper activities for
children
 like playing outside. The
children
 might be facing some kind of slow learning, being ADHD, or developing some undesirable traits
such
 as being anti-social, etc. In conclusion, because of the bad approach
of
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 parenting,
children
 spend too much
time
 on
smartphones
 rather than going outside to play, etc. And It is a bad development in my opinion.
Children
 being on a phone all the
time
 can cause so much trouble.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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