Smoking should be banned in public places because it not only harms the smokers, but also those who are nearby. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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much

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smokers nowadays, and in

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tell about what I think about it.

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, I want to say that there're 1.1 milliard

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untill

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good

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for it. I know some people who are smoking for

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, they can't run for a long time and it shows how bad is smoking. But

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some

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take 11 minutes of your life. I think you saw how horrible

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health, so it's the

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reason why smokers should stop smoking, My dad is smoking for more than 20

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cann't

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run very fast. And as I said before,

cigarete

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cigarettes

take 11 minutes of your life, There is an interesting fact that the most

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person smoked

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she was 108

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not

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chocolate a week, so count how much

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she live if she would not

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if you'

follow my

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you'

be a healthy and happy man. So you mustn't

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you. So be

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