Smoking should be banned in public places because it not only harms the smokers, but also those who are nearby. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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smokers nowadays, and in

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take 11 minutes of your life, There is an interesting fact that the most

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be a healthy and happy man. So you mustn't

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