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Nowadays a lot of students decide to take online English lessons for loads of important reasons. But,
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english
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teacher
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 will explore the pros and cons of online teaching on the internet. On the one hand, there are loads of advances for lessons at a private or official language institute.
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 learning with eye to eye contact is more
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 and the interactions between
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pupils learning
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 language skills vis a vis with other pupils.
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 of taking online classes should be
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 people from all l over the world on one screen and it
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doesent
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Furthermore
, the most pressing argument for
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online teaching
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 it helps people with less time and a whole working day to be more
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flexibility
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 to start your online lesson at your workplace. To
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, in my
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better success
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 that the advances of
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 overweigh the drawbacks.
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