Some people think that organizing international sports events is good for the host country while others think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Nowadays, the issue related to unpaid community
services
is debatable among
school
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and parents. Some parents think their
kids
are already occupied with a lot of subjects and
also
should not be getting familiar with the reality of
world
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this
early. I personally believe schools should add
such
projects to develop self-confidence, leadership quality and empathy.
Therefore
, they should not be restricted at all. There are several reasons
behind
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why unpaid community
services
should be compulsory. Participating in charity and
development
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of
neighbourhood
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the neighbourhood
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will add moral values and improves behavioural values in
kids
.
For example
,
while
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donating their discarded stationery, clothes,
footwear
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and footwear
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to someone who is in need of them will add gratitude to them.
Also
,
while
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transferring their knowledge to
youngers
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younger
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will increase their confidence in
the
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studies.
Also
as we know ‘Practice makes a man
perfect’
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perfect
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,
kids
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so kids
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will be confident in any subject
areas
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area
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. With the advancements
of
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technology
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competition is high among pupils and we cannot forget the huge amount of
syllabus
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to cover in short spans. If we make community
services
mandatory, it may affect their studies.
For example
, if we force
kids
for good deeds
in
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the pressure of tests or any submission, it will make them mad. They might go in against
of
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such
services
. On the similar side, after seeing people at charity or neighbourhood who do not have basic life necessities some
kids
may get affected negatively. To conclude, the compulsion will affect the studies or put
bad
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impact on
new
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generation yet there
is
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beyond
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benefits that can be seen by indulging them in these activities.
Nevertheless
, it is playing an important role for
kids
, so that they can develop human values and good deeds.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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