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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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Nowadays and
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 of the increasing number of trips, tourism generates a significant portion of national for many
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. There are numerous
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 and disadvantages to the prosperity of the touristry industry which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. As far as I am concerned the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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, one evident benefit is that travel makes a contribution to economic growth.
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, visitors tend to spend large amounts of money on accommodation, transportation, food, and other Services. By way of example, along the coastline in Istanbul which is a good place to spend time for the tourist and local individuals, sellers are trained to bring interesting options for buy and
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 of
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, the economy of
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 area has improved.
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, I strongly believe that a considerable sum of developing
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’ success is attributed to attracting tourists.
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, in some
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 like Iran, where their wealth is rooted in Oil sales, they should invest in other industries
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 as
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 one to raise their growth. There is no denying the fact that any industry has drawbacks too, and I strongly believe that the importance of travelling
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 should not be exaggerated by planners. In
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 regard, many
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 witnessed a dramatic growth in the statistics of society's vices which is an alarming and serious problem.
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, in the east of Asia, plenty of travellers are faced with thieves and lose their stuff like their camera, phone, money, and even their food. If
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 problem is not handled in time, the total quantity of tourists will dwindle due to unsafe destinations. According to what has already been discussed there are many
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 and disadvantages to the travel industry while the
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 outweigh the disadvantages, without a shadow of a doubt, in some locations rising numbers of travellers make a contribution to increasing crime.
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, it should not be forgotten that tourist trade serves as a remedy for the development of a country in different aspects. These days touristry has generated a significant portion of national income for many
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 so they should take drastic steps to manage benefits and drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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