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Hello, my name is Unal. Today I and my groupmates are going to talk about our achievements in terms of the
project
 called “Rescued Lives” and the procedures which took until
this
 period.
To begin
 with, there are some reasons for the establishment of
this
project
. The
first
 possible reason was enlightening people about animal
welfare
 in the region and invoking them to cease animal abuse. As we know, animal
welfare
 is one of the most encountered problems in Azerbaijan. In order to get rid of the problem, we decided to take several steps for raising awareness of animal
welfare
.
In other words
, our aim so far was encouraging people to recognize animal sentience. What we needed from the students
initially
 was
the
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 remark for the
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 of the
project
, so we primed a survey among ADA students. We planned to make
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 for the shelter and visit
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 to make close contact with street animals. As
such
, we made polls among ADA students to recognize their attitude toward stray animals.
Moreover
, we decided that our team members give information to their neighbourhood based on animal
welfare
. To enlarge the coverage, we needed to share our work outside of the class.
Therefore
, we commenced to create a social media account and posted our accomplishments in terms of the current
project
. Now, Nigar will deal with the initial procedures.
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