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Travelers and business people often come into contact other cultures briefly. What are the main advantages of doing so?

#travelers #business #people #contact #cultures
Well
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 it is not wrong to say that each and every person like to get knowledge about different culture and
city's
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cities
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 and mainly
this
 chance to explore more
an
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and
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 more towns goes to
bussinessman
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businessman
businessmen
 and
travelers
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travellers
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 because they use to see
myraid
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myriad
 of scene and love to eat ample of famous cuisine while
traveling
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. In fact , I completely agree that every explorer and store person has
idea
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an idea
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 about
plethora
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the plethora
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 of places . I would
like
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tolike
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 share the merits but on the other
side
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i
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 would
also
 like to share
de-merits
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 of
above
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the above
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 statement in
further
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a further
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 essay .
First
 and
foremostly
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, going to numerous new land can
also
 help
person
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a person
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 to get time from
busy
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their busy
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 routine and it
also
give
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day
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a day
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 for his/her family members .
Furthermore
 , travelling to other culture help to see
meet
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and meet
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 a lot of individuals as well
it
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apply
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also
lend
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 a hand from cope .
In Addition
 , exploring other countries can give chance to represent the nation and it
also
give
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 chance to take
GPD
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the GPD
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 of
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the contry
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contry
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country
 at
peak
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its peak
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 .
Nonetheless
 , some countries nowadays
opening
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 a big
site
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sites
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in
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which pupils from
different
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a different
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state
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states
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 can visit to see .
For Instance
 , India has recently
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 of Unity in
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a very
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 wide area and it is
symbol
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a symbol
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 of "FEARLESS" ample
of
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human beings come to see it from foreign cities .
However
 we seldom give a
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 to
ponder
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 over
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other
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 side of the essay , there are some drawbacks
also
 .
Moreover
 , going to various
place
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places
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 can be trouble for some
village
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villages
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 because they are not much bigger than
rural
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a rural
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area
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areas
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.
Additonally
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Additionally
, some company
fee
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feel
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 that people who come to visit their hometown
they
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take some
speacial
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special
 things to their metropolis to make it great .
Last
 but not the least , agrees
to
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with
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 other culture language is the biggest barrier
in
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on
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road
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the road
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 and it is not
cup
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a cup
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 of tea for
every one
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. To Cite an Example , as per
latest
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a latest
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 article published in "HUFFINGTON POST' 50% of Indian students go
to
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abroad for
further
 studies but they get
return
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the return
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 to their hometown in
few
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a few
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 years
becaue
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because
 of extreme level
mother
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of mother
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tounge
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tongue
. By the way of conclusion , having contact with many
society
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societies
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 is proactive but pupils should
also
 think about their own home whilst some
humanity
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 places
also
 approve offence which is not bad for others .
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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