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To succeed in a business, one needs to know math’s. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that working in
economic
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the economic
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 field requires a
depht
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deep
 knowledge of Mathematics. Personally, a person or a businessman will need
Math
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 as their tool to achieve anything else.
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,
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 can
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 sophisticated equations. Businessmen can use
math
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 to calculate their income, outcome or the salaries of employees.
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, they can count the profits those employees bring and
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 give reasonable wages.
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, learning
Math
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 will allow people to have a creative mind and improve critical thinking.
Undoubtably
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, a genius in
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 or other fields related to
Math
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 always solves the issues in the fastest and most intelligent ways.
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, those who intended to graduate
science
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from science
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 or
math
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class
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 will have more chances to meet with success.
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, some undergraduates confirmed that they did not complete any class or school but still came off well. It might be true in a few cases, but in reality, they must have little knowledge
about
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 to solve easy problems. To achieve
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 a successful result in
business
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, a company must have accountants and managers in
economy
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, but on top of
that is
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 a leader who has trustable ideas and strategies to bring their team
come
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 up with extraordinary solutions. In conclusion,
math
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 is not only the way to succeed in
business
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, but it is still crucial when they want to start a
business
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 with a minimum
time
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of time
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 and money. Undergraduates can still
be succeed
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 in
business
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, but they are required to gain knowledge from life or primary
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 classes.
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