Some think that the best way to stay fit is to join gym. while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often argued by some people that the best way to keep it
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fine is to join a
health
club.
Although
, others believe that doing regular activities is enough to stay healthy.
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and give some relevant examples to spot my point of view. To commence with
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opinion, many people think that it is crucial to join a gym to stay fit because concentration plays a vital role in every field to complete
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successfully.
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, the gym provides
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peaceful environment to do every kind of
exercise
in one place and
also
provides
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us with
a trainer who teaches us how to do perfect
exercise
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it is very necessary to
exercise
every body part.
For example
,
health
clubs have a timetable of everyday physical jerks.
That is
why we should join a gym.
On the contrary
,those who are in favour of the latter discuss that they have their own argument. They believe that everyday activities are more than enough to keep healthy
such
as walking ,
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stairs and daily routine work.
That is
why if the common forms of
exercise
are done daily, these will help to burn calories and control obesity and
also
improve overall
health
. To
further
explain , the World
health
organisation
also
believe that if a person walked around a thousand steps and climbed a hundred stairs daily have a very good
health
and fitness level. To conclude, it is very important to do
exercise
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every
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body part
which is not possible in daily work. So , we have to join a
health
spa to keep fit.
Hence
, I certainly favour the former opinion.
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