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Discipline is an ever-increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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●Discipline is one of the growing problems in modern schools. Some think that discipline
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 should be more responsible, while others think that
parents
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 have a big role in making their children polite and disciplined. I think it mostly depends on the
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 ●
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, many
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 depend more on the
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 for the
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students'
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 attendance and attendance at school, because if
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 bring up their children, they behave in the same way at school and at home.
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, there is a saying in your
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 that a child is a mirror of its father and mother, and so are its
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.
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, many
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 should be strict in their child's
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 and should give good
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 to their child from a young age, and
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 will ensure that the children will be self-disciplined everywhere. ●
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, many
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 think that how
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 behave in public depends on the
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 and discipline of
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, and the strictness and
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 given by
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, because
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 spend a
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 of their days in school, and according to statistics,
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 are talking about
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 who teach well and follow the
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 given by them, and
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 is a clear proof of their dependence on
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. ●In conclusion, some
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 say that the discipline of
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'
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 depends more on fathers and mothers
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 because in your
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, they do what they want. Some say it depends on the
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. According to meaning, fathers are more dependent on mothers
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