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Discipline is an ever-increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In recent years, training is more rising trouble in
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academy
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. Few humans strongly believe that
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 and fathers. From my point of view, it more depends on
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children
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parents
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 tend on training their
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 because
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 teach a lot of
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for
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 up earlier in the morning.
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, the
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 are together with
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 than
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 are raised by their
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 until they go to high school.
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, according to psychology research
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behaviours
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 atmosphere in
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students
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 discipline is more
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.
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,
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 have a special role in disciplining
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, because if
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 from the worldly side,
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 will give them knowledge and help them to find their way in the future.
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, in my country, many people believe that
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 strictly control the education of
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. In conclusion, it can be said that both
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 have a great contribution to the education of teenagers
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 because
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 spend a lot of time with their
parents
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 and
teachers
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