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Some people think that tourists should follow the traditional customs of the host country. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some say that tourists must obey the tradition of the country they travel to. I fully disagree with
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 viewpoint. In
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 essay, I am discussing a few reasons to elaborate on my choice.
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, there are some traditions in cities which are harmful. India is a salient example. Some
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 of India avoid ladies washing their bodies when they are in their menstrual period.
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, some healthy habits are specified as breaking the law, which would lead to punishments.
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, it is evident that forcing local processes on people who are visiting the area to get new experiences might affect them negatively. Clothing is another major part of traditions. There are some
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 of the world where lads do not put on clothes to cover the upper part of the body.
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, locally crafted jewellery is worn on various body
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. To exemplify, in some red Indian societies, they cut out
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 of lips and put a ring through that wound as a symbol of brave.
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, it is clear that customs are always not delighted to follow. It could be uncomfortable for someone
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 not a native. In conclusion, part of the mass says that travellers should accept any tradition of the places that they visit. I can not agree with that statement because humans around the world are not the same. Divers ways of doing the same thing are not a new thing in human nature. Cultural norms should not be forced but exposed to others to experience and feel
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